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May 31, 2007 at 8:21pm
Subject: Look Away/a moment with jon
This is a poem I wrote after my Science Final today. It came pretty fast, and I think that I like it the way it is. *shock* It's first title was 'Look Away', but I think I like'a moment with jon' more. Comment on it, please! Did you like it in general, do you think something shoud be changed...
Don't be afraid to critic it, I hate it when people try not to hurt my feelings by being vague. I would much rather someone be upfront about whether they liked it or not.
a moment with jon
simple memories have a reminder
and everybody's read the lines befor
for a moment we reached an understanding
then i blinked and looked away
i was blushing when they saw me
and asked me what had happened
a mumble of nothing, it was nothing
and i turned and walked away
your eyes penetrated my soul
and i wished to never leave
there was a pounding in my chest
and i know it wasn't my heart
locked-on eyes not saying a word
made me think that i knew who you were
just ten seconds can seem just ten years
and any further seems forever
i couldn't sleep, couldn't even eat
as i lay in bed trying my hardest
to remember to breathe, to remember to think
to realise what happened that day
i don't understand what it really truly was
it was so much bigger than me
it was so much bigger than you
it was so smaller than the world
a moment in time
with your eyes locked on mine
and then i looked away
why would i look away?
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