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Posted: 06 Feb 2011 03:41 AM       Subject: Shadowland.
Wait, don't go,
I wish to see your face.
My only ray of hope
In this barren, haunted place.

Wait, please stay,
I don't want to be alone
You're the only radiant thing
This dark place has ever known.

Wait, what's happening?
I can't hold on to your hand.
You're an evanescent shadow,
A mere ghost of a whole man.

Wait, hold still,
Let me look into your eyes.
Let me help you forget your tortured past
Of bitterness and lies.

Please, don't run,
I beg you, stay with me.
I need a chance to show you
All the things that we can be.

I know that you are broken,
Don't worry, so am I.
Give me a chance to prove to you
That I'll never say goodbye.

Look, do you see that?
The tendrils of mist that obscure your face
It's fading, dissipating,
As a warm glow takes its place.

I squint my eyes at the haze
My breath hitching as I do,
Because what I see before me
Is the wonderful, reformed you.

My gaze stops on your eyes,
So beguiling and so warm
And I know within that instant
That you're different than before.

You overcame your past,
You put your faith in me.
So now it's time for us to go
And be what we want to be.

You and I walked identical paths,
Two ghosts, one and the same.
Just trying to get through life,
And all its sick and twisted games.

But we are no longer ghosts,
And I can finally hold your hand.
So walk with me and we'll leave behind
This horrible shadowland.
Would it be okay if I took your breath a w a y ?
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Posted: 06 Feb 2011 03:58 AM         Subject: RE: Shadowland.
Katy, i really think you should be published.
I hope you know that it's not normal to be able to write this well.
I have some family members that teach at Brown, (I'm serious, A man that was nominated for an Edgar Award has sit in my house and talked about Flight Of The Conchords with me, and you are every bit as good as he is.)
You are talented, so talented. Does it take you long to write these?
You need to be published, i mean that, your body of work is already great and you're only nineteen. It's extraordinary.
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Posted: 06 Feb 2011 11:04 AM         Subject: RE: Shadowland.
All I can say is 'wow'. This is amazing, Katy!
My name is Kelly

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Posted: 08 Feb 2011 06:52 AM         Subject: RE: Shadowland.
Oh wow, definitely not the response I was expecting. :shock:
Thank you so, so much, Dre. You're just too kind. ♥ And you too, Kelly. <33 :]

As as far as time, well, it kind of depends. This one took me about fifteen minutes. Some can take up to a few hours, but in general, it takes me about 15-30 minutes to write poems. When I have to force myself to think of what to say, those are the ones that take the longest. But poems like these, where I'm just randomly struck with the sudden inspiration to write them, they flow quite easily from my brain to the computer/notebook. :p

Anywayyy, thanks, again. C:
That was definitely a big boost to my confidence in my writing. <33
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Posted: 10 Feb 2011 09:38 AM         Subject: RE: Shadowland.
Oh wow, Katy. Seriously, you should be like some famous writer or something. You are truly amazing! <3
Keep it up, love ♥
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