Topic: My First..Ever!
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germ-x


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Posted: 03 Sep 2009 10:50 AM       Subject: My First..Ever!
I guess I don't really know what it is. It started out as a song. But I'm no good at writing so I have no idea. I just know I wrote it. And want everyone's honest opinion. If its terrible then tell me so I won't ever show anyone else. I really hope its ok. But anyway, here it is:

It wasn't working anymore
I couldn't make you happy
We tried our best, but I guess, we just aren't meant to be.
So many excuses fall from your mouth, but lead to the same conclusion:
You are you, and I am me,
we are no longer we.

I've questioned and cried, wanted to die,
I've lied to myself and said we were fine.
I've been through all the stages
But I'm no longer filled with rage.
And I am still just me.

I pull the shirt from the box under the bed.
And as I lay here, your scent fills my head,
the memories come flooding back:
the way you used to look at me, the way you touched my back.
You'd slip your arms around my waist and my heart began to race.

But fast forward a few months to my hateful disposition,
and your constant questioning, the pleading desperation.
And I know why we are not we.


The End
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Posted: 03 Sep 2009 04:00 PM         Subject: RE: My First..Ever!
Emerald, this is amazing.
And I'm being honest.

It's not terrible, I love it !
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Posted: 03 Sep 2009 04:38 PM         Subject: RE: My First..Ever!
Oh. My. God.
That was amazing, not to mention touching.
I would kill to be able to write something such as this.
IT"S AMAZING <3
"When the sky turns gray
and everything is screaming
I will reach inside
just to find my heart is beating"
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Posted: 03 Sep 2009 04:51 PM         Subject: RE: My First..Ever!
Really? Wow. That wasn't what I was expecting.
Thank you both so so much!
I'm really glad you like it.. :D
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