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Posted: 20 Jul 2009 05:55 PM       Subject: When I'm with you...My first poem)
When I'm with you...


When Iím with you itís like youíve taken over my body.
Itís almost like magic.
My heart booms 10 times more then ever.
My hands sweat, almost enough to make a small pond.
My ears play sweet, loving music.
My knees get so weak I almost fall.
My mind gets filled with funny things and corny words.
My mouth never opens, which can be a pretty good think.
But in the end itís not ever a bad feeling. That's Never A Bad Thing.
So come to me as if you would like a kid comes to their parents.

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Posted: 20 Jul 2009 06:41 PM         Subject: RE: When I'm with you...My first poem)
Ooo, Kelly. I liked it! Not bad for a first. =]

My first was like...waaaay bad. HORRIBLY bad! Cause I tried to write it with the rhymes and crap instead of letting it just come to me....

lol Nicely done!
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Posted: 20 Jul 2009 08:05 PM         Subject: RE: When I'm with you...My first poem)
Yes, I really like it. For your first time it's amazing.
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Posted: 29 Jul 2009 03:57 PM         Subject: RE: When I'm with you...My first poem)
I loved it. great Job!
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Posted: 08 Aug 2009 01:11 AM         Subject: RE: When I'm with you...My first poem)
Thank you & I just did it like that. I didn't actually sit down & think as I wrote it.

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Posted: 09 Aug 2009 04:55 PM         Subject: RE: When I'm with you...My first poem)
It's really good!!
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Posted: 10 Aug 2009 03:27 PM         Subject: RE: When I'm with you...My first poem)
Very good Kelly :)

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Posted: 11 Aug 2009 07:29 AM         Subject: RE: When I'm with you...My first poem)
It's great, Kelly.
I liked it a lot. :D
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Posted: 11 Aug 2009 07:44 PM         Subject: RE: When I'm with you...My first poem)
Awwie, thank you so much. :) You all are beautiful!

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