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Posted: 19 Jun 2009 04:23 AM       Subject: crappy first poem about the guy that's keeping me up tonight
you're more flawed than the latest fad
my heart's key tumbles down a black hole
you're pretentious and you'll show it
but you're magnetic and you know it
you keep me in a fool's paradise
then predictably release your grip
just to watch my steep spiral of despair
you know nothing beneath my surface
i'm coasting for some grounded dock
but without you i find no purpose
you couldn't have been searching all along
because that's how long i've been here
can't keep track so i fear the worst
please don't make me spell that word
but can someone explain what i'm in?
&♥, Mel
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Posted: 19 Jun 2009 09:24 AM         Subject: RE: crappy first poem about the guy that's keeping me up tonight
I like it, it's really good and full of emotion (:
I found a love I had lost
It has been gone for too long
Hear no evil in all directions
Execution of bitterness
Message received loud and clear

Don't change for you
Don't change a thing for me
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Posted: 19 Jun 2009 02:06 PM         Subject: RE: crappy first poem about the guy that's keeping me up tonight
Aw.
I heart it. :)
It's adorable.
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Posted: 19 Jun 2009 02:48 PM         Subject: RE: crappy first poem about the guy that's keeping me up tonight
That wasn't crappy at all, it was really good and cute. :)
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Posted: 19 Jun 2009 02:49 PM         Subject: RE: crappy first poem about the guy that's keeping me up ton
wow thanks haha. its about a guy friend i went to high school with. i had a crush on him almost the whole time. it was a boarding school and he was from korea where his dad owns a cell phone company. hes cute and hilarious but hes a little full of himself, but he can get away with it because everyone loves him. anyway in korea theyre required to go to the army for two years so thats what hes doing and i just found out so ive been worrying.
but anyway, thanks :)
&♥, Mel
aug28 taking woodstock
sept11 fashion week

les temps sont durs pour les rêveurs
    You used to be alright
       What happened?
  Et cetera, et cetera
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